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after a day
the ploughed field has
a fine crop of seagulls
It was full of them!

Wow, a DD! What a great thing to come home to after being away for the weekend. Cheers!


Many thanks to who explained in much clearer words than my inane babble about haiku spirit, why the 5-7-5 rule doesn't necessarily apply to English haiku.

"The haiku in English is an ambiguous form, but the syllable rule is redundant because it doesn't say anything about stresses, it's just an arbitrary almost-equivalent to the Japanese. Because the languages are so different, that element of haiku is pretty untranslatable. But the rough outline, style (single image and point) and subject matter (generally but not exclusively nature and seasons) are pretty straightforward."
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Daily Deviation

Given 2006-10-01
Strange Growth by *Bogbrush is a very well-crafted single-image poem. ( Featured by PoeticWar )
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saintartaud Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2006  Professional General Artist
I like this. The image is vivid and creatively constructed. Also fits in with my understanding of the haiku form quite well.
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:iconbogbrush:
Bogbrush Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2006
I'm glad you liked it. Many thanks for the great comments too.
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SOCDinosaur Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
Um, I lied. It's a Haiku. <3
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:iconbogbrush:
Bogbrush Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2006
Hehe, no worries.

The inspiration came from a field near where I live. The farmer had ploughed it the previous day and the next day when I walked past, there were so many seagulls looking for food in the field, it looked like they had been grown as a crop.
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SOCDinosaur Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
Not a Haiku... Whatever.

What was your inspiration?
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wildheartfreesoul Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006  Professional General Artist
One time, a seagull swooped out of the sky and grabbed my hotdog. I was little and i cried.

Great poem. :D
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:iconbogbrush:
Bogbrush Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2006
Thank you :)

I think I'd be upset too if a seagull stole my hotdog!
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:iconcheese-cube:
cheese-cube Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
While this is rather ingenious I can see many people denouncing this as not being art and claiming that it is not deserving of a DD because many believe that, due to the pieces minimalism and simplicity, that "I could have done that myself". Many artists, such as Jackson Pollock, have been burdened by such criticism. I like to think of myself as a rather open minded person so I want to embrace this as a piece of art but there is still the voice in the back in my mind repeating the aforementioned criticism. To put it simply I feel rather conflicted by this piece.

Regardless I think this is great work. I feel a subtle connection between it and my place of birth, Australia, because Australia relies on agriculture and we have an over abundance of seagulls (Of course I'm probably just over-analysing it and missing the point). I think it's refreshing and different that a work as minimal as this has been given a DD. Congratulations and keep at it.
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Bogbrush Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2006
I must admit, I've been guilty on occassion of thinking similar thoughts, usually when visiting art galleries. I learnt my lesson however, when I visited one of my friends who does minimalist art and I saw exactly how much work went into it. Now, while I still might not like what I'm looking at, I can at least appreciate it.

The area where I live is quite rural too and quite far inland (although in England, that means about 50 miles...) so a large number of seagulls is quite unusual, but I'm glad you got the connection. Cheers for the comments and I shall certainly keep at it :)
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Chossenji Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006   Traditional Artist
Well said, you just saved me a minute or two. :)
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cheese-cube Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2006
I do what I can.
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:iconbananaprincess:
bananaprincess Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
Congrats on the DD. I enjoyed reading your haiku in the Haikurwrimo collection, and this is another great one. :)
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Bogbrush Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2006
Cheers :) I'm glad you liked it.

After the haikuwrimo, I feel like I've been a little slack with my haiku writing - I'll definitely have to look out for some inspiration :)
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JeyBarnes Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
What a vivid image. You've done a lot in such a minimal format... I love it!
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Bogbrush Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2006
Cheers :)
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skeletonzoo Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
This is throughly awesome and bizarre. Congrats on the DD! You deserve it regardless of the number of syllables.
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Bogbrush Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2006
Thank you, glad you liked it :)
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P1pp1N Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006  Hobbyist General Artist
Are you Philip Hale?
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:iconbogbrush:
Bogbrush Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2006
I am indeed :)

There's also a Philip Hale who does artwork for the covers of Steven King's books but I'm not him...
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P1pp1N Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2006  Hobbyist General Artist
:)

nice poem. v. random
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:iconbogbrush:
Bogbrush Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2006
Cheers!

Random is always good :)
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P1pp1N Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2006  Hobbyist General Artist
:D

i agree
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AngelaD Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
:w00t:

Congrats on the DD!!
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:iconbogbrush:
Bogbrush Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2006
Thank you :)

It made me feel like :faint:ing
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Torrens-Sepelio Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
An interesting and vivid haiku, very well done.
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:iconbogbrush:
Bogbrush Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2006
Thank you very much :)
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Luminora Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006   Writer
I read it...thought about it for a moment...read it again. What a simply wonderful little piece.
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:iconbogbrush:
Bogbrush Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2006
Glad you liked it :) Many thanks!
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PoeticWar Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006   Writer
Hey wait! It's not 5-7-5!

lol.
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Bogbrush Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2006
Hehe, now where have I heard that before ;)

Many thanks for the feature :)
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bananaprincess Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
:giggle:
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Amalgamadora Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006  Hobbyist General Artist
I agree with the spirit of a haiku. A haiku from Japan isn't meant to be a strict form, the 5-7-5 is just something they did. That is why most haiku are written about nature, because haiku are meant to be free-spirited, and nothing is more free than nature. If your poem doesn't follow a guideline of syllables, that doesn't make it any less of a haiku. It has the free-spirited, nature like harmony that the former Japanese haiku had, and it is an excellently written poem that many people are narrow-mindedly reading. A haiku is supposed to be open in spirit, therefore they must be read with an open mind. Great poem, it is a well deserved DailyDeviation.
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Bogbrush Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2006
Many thanks for the great comment, I think you've described haiku perfectly.

Cheers for the :+fav: too.
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Amalgamadora Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2006  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome :D
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MSJames Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
Congrats on the DD man, well deserved indeed!
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:iconbogbrush:
Bogbrush Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
Thank you very much :)
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Tuskin Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Mmmm. What a nice little Haiku. I'll be thinking on this one for a while.
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Bogbrush Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
Cheers :)
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MonkeyDan1 Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
I too was going to pick you up on the syllable structure. Or, indeed, lack of it. Sorry, but this isn't a haiku as they are recognised, and indeed said to be in the dA category description for "Haiku".
Dan
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Bogbrush Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
No worries.

It's a continuing argument within the journals of English language Haiku Societies on what constitutes a non-Japanese Haiku with the 5-7-5 structure being one of the main points of contention. One one side there's those that say that a haiku needs to be in a strict 5-7-5 form and on the other, those who argue that the Japanese language has a totally different structure from English and to get the feel right, while adhering to the spirit of haiku is more important.

You can probably guess which side I'm on.
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AmbrMerlinus Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
Is that really a haiku? It is not 5-7-5...
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Bogbrush Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
While a Japanese Haiku should be of the 5-7-5 structure, there's an on-going arguement on whether English haiku needs to be or not with one side arguing that it's the technical definition that's important and the other side saying that it's the spirit of the thing that's important.

I tend to go for the spirit if I can't use the 5-7-5 structure for what I want to say.
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AmbrMerlinus Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
What is the spirit of haiku, then?
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:iconbogbrush:
Bogbrush Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
Generally it's to make an observation on nature, trying to capture a single moment in time in a clear, uncluttered and minimalist manner.
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AmbrMerlinus Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
I see. Well then, I suppose you accomplished your mission. Well done.
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nybatteri Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
It still has a pattern. 4/5/6. There is much more to haiku than the made up 5/7/5 version.

This is a wonderful poem (:
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Bogbrush Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
Thank you :)
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:iconnybatteri:
nybatteri Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2006
Of course.
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AmbrMerlinus Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
It's okay, I suppose. I don't really feel moved, inspired, or amused by it.
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Serain Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2006
Really? That's interesting, since I feel the sudden urge to paint an accompanying image to go with this.
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